In Monday's assembly, the whole school had the treat of listening to two pieces of Year 5's writing. It was based on a film about a lighthouse and the lighthouse keeping when danger is about to encroach the village.
EVA wrote an amazing newspaper article:
Last night, a terrible tragedy was avoided when a ship nearly crashed into the rocks (in Coolsville) after the lighthouse light went out. Derrick Platter has run the lighthouse for 37 years and he said there had never been a problem before.
Last night, 9.48pm, in Coolsville, Mr Platter was alarmed by a very disturbing sound. Then the life-saving beam suddenly failed.
Cameron also wrote an enthralling newspaper article:
The great, old lighthouse manager (Fredrick Spaghetti) was at work when the light went out. During when this happened, Frederick was running up the main lighthouse staircase as afast as his little, old legs could carry him. When he reached the top he said, "I feel like I have just run a marathon."
Well done to the these two who have used:
Varied punctuation - brackets for parenthesis, speech in a newspaper article, commas to mark adverbial phrases and clauses.
Excellent examples of language - tragedy, disturbing, avoid, accidentally.
Thank you for your confidence to read your work aloud in assembly and your effort in your work. Well done to you both!
EVA wrote an amazing newspaper article:
Last night, a terrible tragedy was avoided when a ship nearly crashed into the rocks (in Coolsville) after the lighthouse light went out. Derrick Platter has run the lighthouse for 37 years and he said there had never been a problem before.
Last night, 9.48pm, in Coolsville, Mr Platter was alarmed by a very disturbing sound. Then the life-saving beam suddenly failed.
Cameron also wrote an enthralling newspaper article:
The great, old lighthouse manager (Fredrick Spaghetti) was at work when the light went out. During when this happened, Frederick was running up the main lighthouse staircase as afast as his little, old legs could carry him. When he reached the top he said, "I feel like I have just run a marathon."
Well done to the these two who have used:
Varied punctuation - brackets for parenthesis, speech in a newspaper article, commas to mark adverbial phrases and clauses.
Excellent examples of language - tragedy, disturbing, avoid, accidentally.
Thank you for your confidence to read your work aloud in assembly and your effort in your work. Well done to you both!